One afternoon,when I were on my way home的were改was--1
.Dark clouds were gathered的gathered改gathering;--2 过去进行时
I began to feel worried so I didn't have a raincoat or umbrella withe me的so改because;--3
I heard of someone calling me from behind的of去掉;--4 hear sb doing 不可加of
I turned to have a look and find that he was Liu Wei 的turned后面加个around; --5 turn to是求助的意思 turn around 回头看
He offered to share his umbrella to me的to me的to改为with;--6
We walked all the ways home的ways改way;--7
thankfully改thankful;--8
I turned to have a look and find that he was Liu Wei的find改found--9
I didn't have a raincoat or umbrella withe me 的OR的后面加个an--10
,when I were on my way home改为,when I was on my way home
Dark clouds were gathered改为Dark clouds were gathering
so I didn't have a raincoat or umbrella 改为because I didn't have a raincoat or umbrella
I heard of someone calling me 改为I heard someone calling me
find that he was Liu Wei改为 found that he was Liu Wei
He offered to share his umbrella to me改为He offered to share his umbrella with me.
How thankfully I was for his help!改为How thankful I was for his help!
第一行:were-was、were去掉
二:so-because、withe是打错的吧、or后加an
三:of去掉
四:find-found、he-it、to-with
五:ways-way、help-helping
六:thankfully-thankful