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Do you agree or disagree with the following statemen:
Compared with people who live in urban areas, the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

In recent years, there is a general tendency that more and more people choose to live in countryside rather than live in the city, because they consider that their families can be taken better care in rural areas. In my opinion, however, I do not think that we can get better care in countryside. After all, city is the development center of a country.

First and foremost, living in urban areas can improve our living quality. Children are able to get the best education and the old can enjoy superior medical services in the city. There are various facilities in urban areas such as cinemas, museums, shopping malls and so on, which those who live in rural areas can never enjoy.

In addition, it is extremly convenient to live in urban areas. The advanced transportation and traffic system can instruct you to wherever you want to go. Besides, you do not need to worry about how much time will you spend in going to the shopping centre or hospital because they all surround your flat.

Nevertheless, some people may believe living in rural areas can relax ourselves better for there are less polution in countryside. Their families can breathe the fresh and clean atmosphere and live a gentle pace life. However, the biggest trouble of living in rural areas is that people can not enjoy as much entertainment as leading a life in city, and everything in countryside is inconvenience. You must take a long hour journey to the city center just for a latest movie from time to time. It not only waste time but also make people exhausted.

Basing all the factors into a nutshell, I think people can take better care of their families in urban areas instead of living in rural areas.

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