学习态度很好呀,32个赞!!
思想内容也挺好,英语表达方面需要改一下。
重点注意邮件格式,要有署名。还有一句话结束后用句号。
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1. 第一行 Mike为人名要大写
2. 第二行第二句开头,than表示比较,估计你是想说then(接着),可是then放在这里也很怪,最好改成and:I am glad to hear from you, and i would like to tell you something about myself.
3. 我已经写出来了,把第二句的me改成myself.
4. 第三句句首大写,并把answer后的to去掉,可以把you改成your question,改为:To answer your question...
5. 从about a friend开始,句子就全错了。应该改为:I want to tell you about a friend of mine, who I think is my role model.
6. I call him "Xiao Gu".另起一句话,不要和上一句连在一起,因为它们没有并列关系。
7. 文章第六行:He don't like to study应改为He didn't like to study
8. 文章第七行:and always be terrible in his school test.
错1: be,改为behave
错2: in,改为on
错3: test,改为tests
9. 文章第八行:be改为became:but when he became a middle school student.
10. 文章第九行:every things改为everything
11. 文章第十行:I think前面逗号改句号
12. 文章第十一行:去掉also
13. 文章第十一行:it's a big change是单独一句话,前后都用句号。
14. 倒数第四行:had改为have;learn改为learned;the man改为a man
15. 倒数第二行:he is very kind前加and
16. 倒数第二,三行: And now, 去掉and;或者把and now改为in fact,更好。
17. 倒数第二行:that's all是单独一句话,后面可加“of him”
以上是语法错误。