英语高手看过来，我这篇英语短文。谢谢各位亲了，急急急~~~马上就要交了！！我爱你们！！！！

第一句，你的句子感觉好复杂，原谅我没看懂。
If I like to be remembered for something
be to become
child,yifu shao, Mother Teresa, Bill Gates,etc.were the idols of me
.I liked to help others who are more pitiful
I would like to make them live like angels,loved and cared for.
Palestinian conflict
children close their eyes
even did not catch up with
often come to think
that peace,that joy,that strongth of presence of each other in the home

我贴出来的好像都有问题，本来我英语也不怎么样。错了或者没看出来请谅解。
你的长句写的太乱了，还有时态，整篇都有问题。在调整一下人称和时态。

好好改一下吧。

加油~

嗨！
你么救了！

我就读了1行，发现3个语法错误。

汗,着急也不至于这么低三下四吧!?
想帮你改一下,但实在不知所云!请把你想表达的意思给我说一下吧!
记住努力学英语吧!

What is the contribution that would make you famous in the world?

If I like to be famous in the world,it must be to become a charitarian.

你的句子有的太复杂，好多地方都要修改。原谅我没有那么多时间帮你修改，你可以去参考资料

。。。。。。。我估计妹子你不如找个例文超一哈。。。